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TOK: WHOLE CLASS FEEDBACK SHEET
Task: Essay – All Knowledge is political. Choose a political issue and discuss
WHAT WENT WELL:
EVEN BETTER IF:
Some good examples were chosen as evidence
Some evidence about thinking in a TOK manner
Some students are constructing their essay well
according to the template ie Intro, AOK 1 claim,
AOK 1 counter claim, AOK 2 claim, AOK 2 counter
There is some evidence of thinking about the
heart/ the nature of AOK’s
Dheemahi: a nicely written piece with
good examples and a clear argument.
Tanish: discussion on citizenship
Soumil: recognizing different perspectives
for the same issue
Aanya: range of research and tracing
origins of Racism in society
Aarya: related to current political issues
Arunima: accuracy referencing
Dia: attempt to evaluate different political
perspectives and linking poverty to
Preparation was improved through wider reading
to have a proper understanding about the nature
of political issues and their basis of understanding
KQ’s were identified and included in the
The Introduction really tackled the Q and
analysed it. Write your conclusion.
Examples used were shortened to no more than
Counterclaims within each AOK were actually
thought about and followed through.
The Q had been fully read and answered: ie how
How to reference accurately, properly and write a
Writing about politics requires an academic
understanding of what politics is and the different
TOK is an academic subject where arguments
need to be carefully constructed.
Examples are exactly that: examples. They are
NOT the argument itself but the evidence for
your points. No more than 2/3 sentence long to
SUPPORT your argument.
IT IS ESSENTIAL to write about the nature of each
AOK in relation to the Q before going into
NEXT STEPS: Targets/ strategies for success
Accurate, but simple, essay presentation: double
spacing, word count, title, student name included.
12 font size, page numbers,
READ actual articles/ textbook. Do not rely just on
vague internet sites.
Write better focused introductions
Avoid writing in a personal style
Avoid writing a personal commentary describing
Avoid vague terms like ‘people said’, ‘real world’,
‘real truth’, ‘everyone believes’
There must be ACCURATE CITATIONS within
essays. This is a basic rule of writing.
Move from descriptive writing to analytical.
PEEL. Please use this basic way of writing each
paragraph so all content is focused to the Q.
(POINT, EVIDENCE, EVALUATE, LINK)
CONCLUSIONS MUST BE written